I dont think you're a bad writer, I just doubt anyone would paay you for this until it was cleaner
what do i know
For Ms. Serious/ Gareth 2004-04-28 14:30:27
Sorry some of the sentences are too long for you - I'll try to stick to a lowere reading age in future
/ gareth 2004-04-28 14:28:01
of course, this missing first paragraph doesn't help
edit/ Ms. Serious 2004-04-28 02:41:38
the people who comment on these forums suck, but the people who edited this piece suck even more.
suck.
boom.
wee.
got some good ideas heera, but they are lost in run on sentences and misplaced commas